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old beacon
hailing all strangers –
mind the land
the adventure ends abruptly
two sailors running aground
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©Wabi Sabi
For Carpe Diem Tan Renga – old beacon
****
old beacon
hailing all strangers –
mind the land
the adventure ends abruptly
two sailors running aground
****
©Wabi Sabi
For Carpe Diem Tan Renga – old beacon
Alas for the sailors who could not see the light. Nicely done.
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[…] at Carpe Diem, or more accurately, a couple of days ago, we were offered Wabi Sabi’s lovely haiku. Though, as usual, I’m a bit late, I had to give it a try. I live 20 minutes […]
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Better to run aground than be lost at sea indefinitely. 🙂
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It seems they didn’t mind 🙂
sailors’ souls
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surely they would be happy of a landing, and luckily the adventure was short 🙂
much love…
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What a sad ending you’ve written to your own first stanza, a great tanka, …
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Actually, the story ended well. My husband and I wandered into shallow waters while on a sailing ‘adventure’ a few years ago! luckily no injuries and the boat was undamaged. And we learned to ‘mind the land.’.
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Glad to hear that, this tanka is from real life … ?
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Yes…..we misread the chart and turned toward the land too soon. The shallow bottom came up to greet our little sail boat and we needed a tow off the shallows. Other than the captain’s bruised ego, all ended well. We were not in the waters pictured in the haiga. We were off the coast of Connecticut.
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Well it was an adventure I think 🙂
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I came this morning, eager to see how you would complete your own haiku for the tan renga, and I wasn’t disappointed. I think many of us run aground as we sail through life!
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Ah,navigating needs skills and not everyone has the patience or the expertise,eh?Love this one Wabi:-)
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i see this really happened – oh, thankfully all turned out well. good tanka 🙂
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Hope it was not a false beacon…
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