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Esther dreams of a period filled
with gauzy comings and goings,
she has a vision of two little girls,
how many years ago?
pajama clad ,nestled on the floor
the tv tuned to jackie gleason,
some kind of tribute show.
one sister has to leave
going by subtle degrees,
creeping away like a hermit crab
crashing into another world
leaving behind an empty shell,
and her only sister.
no one had the power
to persuade her to stay,
not Esther, not anyone,
and before she leaves,
she carefully opens up
a hungry space in Esther’s heart.
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For The Sunday Whirl ‘#122’
For Poets United ‘ Pantry’
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Sad.
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WoW…excellent.
“creeping away like a hermit crab”
my favorite line here.
Thanks for sharing.
Peace
Siggi
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A little sad, but a cool story…
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sad and empty…but resigned
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A gem this. Melancholy. Love the ending where she opens up her sister’s heart to perhaps
one day also leave.
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Lovely poem.
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Quite a story here….leaves me feeling sad, but definitely well penned.
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so hard the one leaving only leaving a shell of space…hard to deal with or understand esp as children….
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Very moving. Enjoyed the style of presentation almost as much as the content!
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somewhat sad..real. i love the feel the end leaves.. a hungry space in the heart.
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Very tender and evocative – skilful work… I enjoyed the emotional resonances in this… Regards Scott http://www.scotthastie.com
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Love the strong connection between the sisters. Awesome write!
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A sad and moving poem. The flow is amazing and writing creates strong visuals where you can actually see one leaving…:)
Brilliant !!
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“a hungry space in Esther’s heart” says it all. Full of pain. I love it!
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That last line was a jolt ~ Sad ending but well written ~
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A wonderful evocative poem!
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Oh wow……you took my breath away with this one. I love your writing Wabi, always a treat to read you.
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Beautifully and skillfully written. Very evocative and that last line is perfect.
Elizabeth
http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2013/08/18/dreaming-wisdom/
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Wabi, you put the reader right there, well done. Though it is quite bittersweet.
Pamela
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and before she leaves,
she carefully opens up
a hungry space in Esther’s heart.
If one needs to go, at least ensure possibility of meeting again. And she did ensure ‘by opening space in E’s heart’. Hopefully they meet again! Nicely Wabi!
Hank
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So beautiful. Touched my heart.
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What a touching scenario you have painted here of love and loss and yearning.
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From “gauzy comings and goings” to the final “hungry space” evolves a a beautiful, almost breathless scenario of sadness. Delightful.
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Bittersweet it is as Pamela has rightly surmised briefly and succinctly!!
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Without even anEsthertizing her first 😉
But seriously, a beautiful write! Very evocative.
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a truly moving piece
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The hungry space in Esther’s heart at the end of the poem leaves me hungering for more!
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Who is to say whether or not Esther will reveal more of her story to me?
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sad, yet a beautiful tease
much love
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Very moving, beautiful.
Anna :o]
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this poem breaks my heart wide open… tender, sorrow-filled… As I read this I think, love remains even after loss, there is hollowness, but not complete emptiness.
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